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Final Web Blog post: How I feel as a Writer

I feel I have fined turned many of my writing skills from basic stuff like puncuation, and grammar to learning how to quote a MLA format in a research paper. I learned about the different types of essays by having the chance to write 4 different types of essays. I had the most trouble with the discriptive essays, learning how to be very detailed in a discription. It was much easier for me to write about either things I knew, or my opinion. In essay 4 I had the chance to write about my politcal views on why I feel Congress should have term limits. It was much easier for me to write about this than essay 2 where we were discrbiing movie posters. Only because I have strong feelings towards essay four.

Overall I feel I have learned a lot but still have a lot to learn. I am a better writer at the end of the semster, but I can only improve with time and experience. I am considering keeping this web blog to help improve and practice on my skills as a writer. I will of course get practice from writing in my other classes, but this will help me on my own time.

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Writting Response 12/3/13

I will be revising my Essay #4. I will be revising my paragraph over Obamacare. I need a better connection on how Obamacare was tied to the shutdown from Congress not coming to a conclusion. The Democrats would not negociate with the Republicans over Obamacare. The Republicans did not want this law to pass. They felt it was not good for the people of the United States. The Republicans even said to the Democrats if you want this Obamacare for everyone so bad and it is so good for the poeple, then why don’t all of the goverment employee’s in Congress also take part in the law. Of course Congress said that their insurance was just fine. Not only do I want to make the point that Congress know’s this is not great insurance, that it is good enough for the people but not them. But Congress’s inability to do their job caused the shut down of the government.

I will also be adding to this essay to talk about the attendence issues with Congress. They are off typically 4 months out of the year. This year they not only had a shutdown, but barely passed any laws. They managed to pass the lowest amount of laws through Congress in over 60 years. All of these points go back to the fact we need term limits for members of Congress and once they serve their term they go home to their state and get a real job! Not sit in D.C for a life time not doing much to help and serve the people fo the United States.


Writing Response: Portfolio, what essay will I be revising

I will be revising my essay #4. This is the main one I will be revising because there was some better points i could have made for a arguments about Congress needing term limits. A really good point my professor made in her final comments on my final draft was I could have talked about the attendance of Congress being a major factor on their poor performance. I will either take out the part of Obamacare where I was trying to make a point that the issues with Obamacare with Congress helped create the shutdown, or I will revise this part of the essay to the message is more clear. I will also be fine tuning some of my other points to make sure they are all clear as well. 

The other essay I will be looking at the revise will be my 3rd one over a advertisement  I could have been more clear on some of my point about the commercial. I also lost some points due not going over if enough looking for mistakes. This was the essay I felt I did the best on but got the lowest grade. So I will be revisiting this essay and going over the final comments to better improve the quality. 


Overview of 1st Semester back to school

My overview of the first semester was it was not easy. For not being in school for over 10 years I am happy to say I will finish above a 3.5 GPA for the semester. I know I have room for improvement to be closer to a 4.0, but I truly see how hard that is really going to be. I am happy that when I saw myself struggling right away I went and got help. Chemistry and Algebra were the two courses I started having the most trouble with, so I went and got tutors. Now going into finals week, they courses are the ones I have the highest grades in. I went from a D in Algebra to a high B, I went from a low D in Chemistry to A. Overall I studied all the time, I feel I worked harder during this semester than I did when I was a District Sales Manager over 10 retail locations. But I had a very good support line, my wife and parents were all there pushing me to make sure I did well. And even though I have a long road ahead to finish my degree, it will be a rewarding one in the end. I have to keep my eye on the larger picture and listen to the support I have from such a great family. I truly feel blessed!


Writing Response: What are my thoughts on my writing this semester

Overall I feel more confident in my writing. I learned useful techniques that will come into play for me later in life. Example using MLA format. Even thought I am a science major and I will be using mainly APA, they are similar and I have a good grasp on how to properly use them. In the first part of the semester we learned how to describe photo’s in great detail so the reader would not have to see the photo, but the words that were used would be able to describe the photo in enough detail that the reader could picture it. This I think was my favorite part of the semester, I have never done any type of writing like that to be descriptive. I enjoyed the essay we wrote on this subject using a personal photo.

This semester really fined tuned my writing. Even though I was not as happy with some of my later grades when I felt my writing was getting better. The grades were properly given. I have no arguments after I read the notes on each essay. I do look forward to our final assignment where we are doing a portfolio over a couple of our essay’s. I already know which essay’s I will be using for this assignment and look forward to having the chance to revision and see the results I come up with. Overall a good class learned a lot enjoyed the teaching methods and assignments. Oh, and of course the blog was fun too. I wish I would have put more time in it and been a little more creative, that is something I will need to work on, my creativity.


Opeining weekend for Deer, not so good

The weather played a big factor in my adventorous hunt this weekend. It was opening weekend for rifle for deer. But due to the weather,strong winds, thunderstorms and being too warm myself, my mother and step father had no luck yet. We still have a few weeks to get us a deer. The good news this weekend when go hunting it will be much colder. This wll help us to at least have a better chance.

When it is windy out, the deer like to lay down and no move. They could be consisdered nocternal, because they only like to come out at night and sleep during the day, But when it gets colder out, they like to walk around and eat and get water. But this weekend it was not the case. I saw one deer run up right behind me, as he was running and jumping I fired 2 shots. But due to him being so close to me, I didn’t have time to look down my scope to get a good shot. So I just pointed and shot. No Luck. I can still see the look on the deers face as he was running by me, I feel he was smiling knowing that there was a very little chance I was going to hit him. He knew exactly when to run by me, and so he waited til my back was turned before he jumped up. While this was a leasoned learned for me this time. Next time I hope to have a little more luck.

 


Writing Response 11/18/13 Swift /A Modest Proposal

I find this essay disgusting. Selling children for profit and even for a “new dish” for the rich to satisfy their hunger is repulsive. There are many other political ways within a country, even back during this time period to have shelters and orphanages for kids to be raised properly, in turn they children have a better shot of not being a theif, or leave the country to go fight a war for another. Children in any society is the future of that culture.

Even the point where a women (breeder) can sell children when they are first born, and will be rid of any extra charges or taxes if they choose to keep the children after a year is wrong. I couldn’t imagine myself seeing a mother and her children on the streets wearing rags and begging. I know this must have been a very dark time in Ireland, but there had to of been better idea’s and ways to fix some of these issues than what this writer is proposing.

Even the point number six where there would be a inducement to marriage, they only want to do this to grow the fattest and healthiest baby’s for the market. While the wives are pregnant the fathers will be as fond of them as they are their mares in foal, thier cows in calf. This is sickning!!!